This is the section that doesn't work as well. Once he lands you get to that pose and it has his head already curled down. He would be first fully extended body wise, then the body curls forward because of the compression and the head would drag, then the body would stop moving forward and that's when the head would move forward.
It feels like his arms are super extended but the head is kinda scrunched together. Does the rig let you extend and move the neck forward more?
Don't forget to a foot roll so that the shin is not compressed. You'd pop his Achilles heel. :)