Sunday, October 23, 2011

Alessandro Chirico - Stand and Sit - Critique

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Hey,

that's a really good start, I like where you're going with this!

Here my picky notes:
- on the up, there could be a more refined timing approach so that you have her a bit slower going up at the very beginning until around x31 and then she uses her legs to push off and the timing of the up movement gets faster.
- on the down I would slow down the beginning as well, then ramp up the speed and then either get faster until the touches the chair (not a hard plump, but pushing the contact more than what you have now), or you have her go down and then slow down around x80 for a few frames, like a little pause, and then have her drop her butt onto the chair (but here as well you should have a harder contact moment)
- her hands on the thighs feel more constrained on it than actually using the arm for a push off or stabilizing. I don't buy the weight of the arms onto the legs
- watch out for her right arm at x39 how it is overstretching
- her wrists suddenly rotate after x39 to 42 and then stop (her right arm is still overstretched at that point); I would give that turn a more natural feeling; right now it feels like a computer rotation without purpose
- overall the body rotates down and up in one axis and it would be cool to have more sideways rotation, like she's leaning a bit; that will help you with the little step she takes after x47; that step feels to isolated in the leg section, with no root or hip movement for balance and weight shift
- her right foot slides back at the beginning and that slide is a bit simplified, so in your next pass you could add a little Y rotation to it as well and maybe TINY side to side tilt
- watch out for the unnatural movement in her right wrist after x65 until x72; the arm bends and the wrist turns back, which is a weird move
- her body and head feel too connected as one unit after x16 when she bends down to around x25; it would be good to break up those movements; same on the way up
- as you introduce a bit more side to side movement (translate and rotate) in the body, it will also affect her head in those directions for balance

Alrighty, hope that makes sense!
JD

4 comments:

  1. thanks for posting these critiques!

    regarding the lack of weight of arms on the thighs: maybe the problem is the placement of the hands? i would have placed the hands further down, closer to the knees (at least on the getting-up part). It easier to get up that way and it seems more natural - placing your weight at the joint (the knees), instead of putting weight on the thighs themselves, which are working in the opposite direction (upwards). what do you think?

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  2. Hi Rafi, thanks for your comment! I thought in the beginning to place the hands a bit further down, but I had some problems with the shoulders and the elbows so at the end i put the hands near the hips. After the critiques of JD i thought to move the hands toward the knees to try to solve the problem of the weight. Maybe the mistake comes from overacting. I've shoot a reference of myself and my hands use to start near the knees. At the very moment i start to anticipate the movement, my hands naturally come closer to the hips and then i start to get up. I'll try to remember your tips once I do it again. Thanks!

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  3. I know what you mean about overacting in the reference, I suffer from it as well.. good luck

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